One day this girl love to run she ran in a race, She live in a home-town called Otara,her name was Isabella she had blue eye’s and brown hair. One morning she got out of bed and her mum come in “ said have you did your room, people are come over today.” Her mum got very angry and told Isabella off. her mum went out...?
Isabella got so angry and ran away from home. (Then) when her mum got into the she “said WHERE IS ISABELLA.” When Isabella got as far as she went she got lot’s. Then she walking thru the path then this man jumped up, and “said where are you going” she look at him and “said what is your name” ray he said. she as slow as asking are you polo she said to ray “yes he said’.
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* One thing I love about your narrative story is the way you use lots of speech marks.
* My favourite sentence of your story is "Her mum got very angry and told Isabella off. "
* One thing I think you could work on next time is adding some similes to your writing.
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